Bay Couple, a Persona Poem

Last month, walking on Wildcat Creek Trail near where I live in the San Francisco Bay Area, I spotted this pair of bay trees by the side of the path.

Two bay trees are in gentle shade, the edge of a grassy sunlit path shows on the right. One bay has multiple thin trunks, one of which curves around the much wider trunk of the other bay, which has a bend below the first bay's branch and leans toward that branch.
photo © Karin Fisher-Golton, 2024

I was quite taken with them and later wrote the persona poem below. (In persona poems, poets write from the point of view of someone or something other than themselves.) Though it didn’t make it into the poem, I think of that bright red leaf on the right as a heart.

Bay Couple

we reside
alongside the wide path
where we hear talk
of the narrow paths above
with city and bay views,
bay like our name,
but we are solid,
only the sharp smells of our leaves flow
unlike that other bay
that we understand to flow
with vast amounts of water, the rain stuff

many pass us by on the wide path
jackrabbits, coyotes,
mule deer, turkeys,
garter snakes, foxes,
the occasional mountain lion,
hawks and vultures, high above,
the small flittering birds,
who land lightly on our branches
to rest or build nests in our bends
and grow their young

mostly in the light hours
humans travel the wide path too,
all sorts of humans, in their bright coverings,
some speeding by on objects called bicycles,
some walking singly or in packs of all sizes

and sometimes a couple of them
stop nearby
they speak in tones, low as a far wind,
then quiet like the time
after the owls and before the crows
and tangle their limbs together
in close connection, called a hug

but few stop to notice
that I have tangled my limbs with older bay,
over these many years,
older bay, who once leaned into
another bay, now long gone,
in this time, these days, these seasons
we two intertwine our twigs,
rooted here, alongside of the wide path

© Karin Fisher-Golton, 2024

Find links to more poetry for Poetry Friday at Tricia Stohr-Hunt’s The Miss Rumphius Effect blog where she writes about pantoum poems, shares one herself, and has links to those by others in her group—plus many links to other poems. I love pantoums, and though I’m not sharing one here, it strikes me that my bay friends’ tangled limbs are reminiscent of pantoum stanza’s tangled lines.

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20 Responses to Bay Couple, a Persona Poem

  1. This is just beautiful–two tangled trees. I love the title because it has a surprising meaning.

  2. Liz Garton Scanlon's avatar Liz Garton Scanlon says:

    Oh, I was so drawn into this relationship — thank you. It’s beautiful.

  3. janicescully's avatar janicescully says:

    Your poem reminded me of a recent visit to the Bay Area to see my son. We walked a trail along a ridge in Pacifica with those incredible views. I enjoyed reading from the perspective of these two trees, imagining what they see. “We two intertwine our twigs/rooted here alongside of the wide path.”

  4. lindabaie's avatar lindabaie says:

    It’s a strong and somber voice, Karin, from this bay couple, and I love how much it notices, unlike those about which it whispered “but few stop to notice”. There are secrets all around us that we might never learn of. Your imagination shows what might be awesome to learn.

    • Thanks! I was thinking about those ideas too. I wonder how many people have noticed this delightful pair. It was fun to think about how much there was to be noticed from that one rooted spot.

  5. PATRICIA J FRANZ's avatar PATRICIA J FRANZ says:

    So fun to eavesdrop on a conversation between trees :)My favorite line:

    then quiet like the timeafter the owls

  6. rosecappelli's avatar rosecappelli says:

    Beautiful! It almost feels like a love poem. I especially like thinking about the quiet time “after the owls and before the crows.” Thank you!

  7. Denise Krebs's avatar Denise Krebs says:

    Karin, so lovely. I can appreciate the young bay knowing it has the same name as the rain place. Not omniscient, but thinking of things important to it. The noticing the hugging of the humans and the then the way it hugs the older bay is just delightful. I love reading that list of animals that walks by it! Wow, what a neat place. Very nice persona poem, and I hope it inspires me to try one.

    • Thanks so much! I really enjoyed thinking about the bay’s perspective–and part of that was imagining all the animals it might see go by and also spend time on its branches. I’m so glad you’re inspired to write a persona poem!

  8. maryleehahn's avatar maryleehahn says:

    The voice you gave these trees sounds perfectly…TRUE.

  9. Karin, I love this poem. A favorite bit is this…

    then quiet like the time
    after the owls and before the crows
    and tangle their limbs together

    …plus that entire gorgeous final stanza. Thank you.

  10. margaretsmn's avatar margaretsmn says:

    I love the point of view of this bay tree. I can imagine the scent. Love all the animals that come by. (I think I fixed the link problem on the progressive poem. Thanks for letting me know.)

    • Thank you, Margaret! I like that you can imagine the scent, it’s so distinctive and a happy association I have with local hikes. Thanks for fixing the link on the progressive poem too!

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